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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps show a plan of one of the floors in
public
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the public
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library
 of two decades ago and how it looks now.
Overall
, during the course of 20 years,
library
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the library
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 went through automatization, adding computer rooms and other technologies,
while
also
 opening a cafe and a lecture room. First of all, in the left corner near the entrance,
reading
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the reading
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 room was replaced with
computer
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a computer
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 one.
Next,
going
further
 from the entrance into the
library
, in the far left corner children's fiction books, with attachment of two sofas, were set up, where previously were located space with CDs, videos, and computer games.
Secondly
,
centre
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a centre
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 feature of the
library
 - tables and chairs were removed. On the right side, closer to the entrance,
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk gave way to
cafe
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the cafe
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. Meanwhile, now, next to it, an adult fiction books, and
information
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an information
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 desk with self-service machines took the previous place of
non-fiction
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the non-fiction
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 section. As the space to give lessons for students was created a lecture room in the far, right corner of the
library
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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