A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter Explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful Give details of when you would be available for work.

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you find
this
letter in good health. I am writing
this
letter to express my interest
to work
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as a part-time volunteer at Saint Jones
museum
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Museum
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in New York
city
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City
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, as I noticed that you are looking for a volunteer to guide tourists. I would love to join your team at
museum
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as I am deeply interested in arts and history.
Moreover
, I am pursuing
bachelor’s
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degree in history at a local university and joining
this
position will help me gain practical knowledge in the subject.
Furthermore
, it will
also
help improve my CV when I apply for jobs in future.
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, as I have good knowledge of arts, sculptures and artefacts, I can provide visitors with good information and guidance.
Additionally
, as I
had
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done a basic course in using computers, it will be beneficial with office work at your museum. If my request is accepted, I
would
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be ready to join the team from the 15th of
may
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2024. I am available after 2pm on weekdays and flexible with working on weekends. I am looking forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Nirav
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minor inaccuracy
Ensure you use punctuation consistently, such as capitalizing proper nouns (e.g., ‘Saint Jones Museum’ and ‘New York City’).
word choice
Use more formal closing salutation: 'Yours sincerely,' instead of 'Yours faithfully,'.
task achievement
The letter responds to all parts of the task, covering why you want to volunteer, your relevant skills, and your availability.
suitable writing tone
You have maintained a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for this context.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with clear paragraphs, each addressing a different aspect of the task.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Volunteer
  • Part-time
  • Unpaid work
  • Museum director
  • Skills and qualities
  • Customer service
  • Organization
  • Team player
  • Flexible
  • Reliable
  • Positive attitude
  • Availability
  • Professional goals
  • Community contribution
  • References
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