The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. (Steve no copyright)

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. (Steve no copyright)
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Presented for consideration is a table detailing figures for the
expenditure
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of consumers on a variety of products in five distinct nations during 2002. Generally speaking, the Irish and Turkish spending on
food
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,
drinks
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and
tobacco
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dominate any other country,
while
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the opposite was true for the Swedish ones.
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, the citizens in Italy spent the most on clothing and
footwear
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, whilst the Turkish spent on
leisure
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and
education
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more than the remaining nations throughout the timeframe. Beginning with Ireland and Turkey, their expenditures on
food
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,
drinks
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, and
tobacco
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were among the highest in the table. Regarding
food
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,
drinks
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and
tobacco
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, the proportion of Ireland purchasers’
expenditure
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was 28.91% compared to 32.14%  in Turkey. With respect to clothing and
footwear
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along with
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leisure
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and
education
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, the Irish people spent approximately 6.43% and 2.21%, respectively. In comparison, Turkish consumers allocated around 6.63% of their spending to clothing and
footwear
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and just over 4.35% to
leisure
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and
education
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. Turning to the remaining three countries, spending levels were generally lower, except for Italy's notable
expenditure
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on fashion. With
food
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,
drinks
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and
tobacco
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, the percentage of Spanish was nearly 18.80%, compared to about 16.36% of Italian and 15.77% of Swedish
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. Regarding fashion, the rate of Italian consumers’ spending was exactly 9%, and Italy's
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on clothing and
footwear
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was exactly 9%, surpassing the spending in Spain and Sweden, both of which were below 6.6%.
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, for
leisure
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and
education
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, the expenditures ranged from 3.22% in Sweden to approximately 1.98% in Spain.
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