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The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#neighborhood #mall #information #features #comparisons
The diagram provides information about a neighbourhood between
befor
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before
 and after a mall that it constructed.
Overall
 the
depict
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 illustrated to section that has a significant change in the left
maps
in contrast
 there was no change in the right
maps
 . Speaking Generally,
the
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 first map there are two
builts
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built
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 in the woods
it
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apply
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book
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a
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 store and
shoe
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a shoe
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 store
moreover
 in under Side there was
lake
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a lake
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 in the park all of those
removed
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were removed
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 to
converted
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 to
mall
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the mall
a mall
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 in
additional
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the
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to the
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built
bulit
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built
 parking , In the middle
maps
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 there are houses and took half houses to make into extra parking .
In
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 the right
maps
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 there
are
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also
house
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houses
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 but there are no
changed
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changes
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 in
the
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apply
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both
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apply
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maps
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map
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words maps with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic flow
  • Land use
  • Residential buildings
  • Commercial activities
  • Local businesses
  • Retail stores
  • Local economy
  • Employment
  • Community facilities
  • Displaced
  • Construction
  • Green spaces
  • Pollution
  • Noise
  • Environmental impact
  • Neighborhood dynamics
  • Transformation
  • Redevelopment
  • Infrastructure
  • Urbanization
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