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Write about the following topic: In the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

#topic #decade #air #travel
It is more trending
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last
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 few years that
people
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airplans
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aeroplanes
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there
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are
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number
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 of reasons for
this
 increasing air travel worldwide
such
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golbe
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globe
 and
financially
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are financially
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more
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stronger than ever before.
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 paragraphs will discuss
about
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this
 statement . To
comence
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commence
,fastly increasing technology make
this
 possible to
traval
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travel
 different countries.
Internet
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 has
great
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 influence on communities to see all around the world and indulge
people
 to visit all these attractive places.
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,
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time
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 proponents only
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 about
few
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a few
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 places
of
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 their states and only
ellite
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elite
class
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classes
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 could be able to travel more states of a country,but now
people
 want to see all those places that which they are interested.
Further more
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,
number
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a number
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 of new airlines
are
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 introduced in
last
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the last
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 decad,which created
compitation
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competition
 and ultimately
low cost
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 travels are possible.
Secondly
,
economy
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the economy
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 of most nations
are
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 stronger
then
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 before.
People
 have more resources for finances that make
them
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it
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 possible to travel
my
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by
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 air .Advertisements of
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 provide knowledge to
average
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the average
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 person so ,he is able to book his ticket online and reserve hotels before reaching
to
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other country
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another country
other countries
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.
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,many individuals are starting their own
business
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businesses
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 in foreign countries and when they visit those states multiple times airlines provide them
special
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 discount cards . To
conculde
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conclude
,
rise
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the rise
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 of expatriate
communitiesand
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communities and
communities
 global living trends are creating demand for international
travels
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travel
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.It is a good trend that
make
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possible
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it possible
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tolearn
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to learn
 about different cultures and
inhance
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enhance
 relationships with other nations.
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structure
Improve the overall structure of the essay. Make sure there is a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each section should flow logically to enhance readability.
cohesion
Work on improving coherence and cohesion by using more linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
evidence
Support your main points with more specific examples and evidence to add depth and clarity to your arguments.
grammar
Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Avoid run-on sentences and ensure correct usage of articles and prepositions.
task achievement
The essay provides a complete response to the task, addressing both reasons for increased air travel and its impact.
clarity
The main ideas are generally clear and comprehensive, with some relevant examples included.
content
Shows an understanding of the positive aspects of increased air travel, such as cultural exchange and global relationships.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aviation industry
  • global economy
  • business travel
  • international tourism
  • budget airlines
  • airfare
  • book flights
  • expatriate communities
  • global living trends
  • convenience
  • efficient aircraft
  • economic growth
  • travel accessibility
  • explore destinations
  • spontaneous trips
  • planned trips
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