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Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success?

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Many
people
 strive to achieve a successful life.
However
,
success
 is a very vague concept which may mean different things to different
people
.
This
 essay will consider
success
 with regard to the workplace, family, and
finally
 personal achievements. For many
people
,
success
 is primarily measured through their careers. For some
people
,
this
 is measured in the monetary value of their salary; if they earn more than someone else they are more successful.
However
, others disregard
this
 view and argue that if you are working in a job that you do not enjoy
then
 you cannot be considered a
success
, regardless of your income.
Instead
, you need to consider job satisfaction and professional achievement.
For example
, teachers who have helped many
people
 achieve their goals or other workers who have successfully realised a project or other target that they had. Another important indicator of
success
 may be the family. Raising and providing for a family is an important goal for many
people
. In
this
 case,
success
 can be measured in how satisfied your family are with close bonds between family members being more important than financial indicators. A final aspect is that of personal achievement. We all have goals and dreams which we would like to achieve. These dreams are very diverse and vary from person to person.
For example
, some
people
 may wish to travel the world; others compete in a marathon
,
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 or write a book. By achieving these things we are accomplishing targets and would feel immensely successful. In conclusion,
people
 may see
success
 on either a professional or more personal level. I would argue that
success
 is individual for everybody but for me, it is a mix of all of the different things described above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fulfillment
  • personal goals
  • happiness
  • career milestones
  • professional development
  • financial independence
  • security
  • philanthropy
  • contribution
  • personal development
  • recognition
  • work-life balance
  • self-improvement
  • well-being
  • subjective
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