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The linegraph gives information about the number of production (in million tonnes) of pulp, timber and paper in European country between 1980 and 2000

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The linegraph gives information about the
number
 of
production
 (in
million
tonnes
) of
pulp
,
timber
 and
paper
 in European
country
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countries
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 between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, the amount of graph shows significant vibration
the
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in the
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 levels of
pulp
,
timber
 and
paper
. The forest
industry
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industry's
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production
 of
paper
seen
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is seen
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 dramatically rising,
whereas
timber
 and
pulp
productions
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production
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 shows a lot of fluctuation in
this
 graph.
Paper
having
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had
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 the biggest trend,
while
timber
 was the smallest
According to
 the
graph
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graph,
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 the
number
 of
production
 in
timber
 shows 5
million
tonnes
 in 1980, after the year
this
 level illustrates 10
million
tonnes
, decreased to 2
million
tonnes
 in 1990, growth to 6, 3
million
tonnes
 by 1995.
Finally
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timber
seen
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saw
has seen
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 7. 9million
tonnes
 the
number
 of forest productions the type of
pulp
, from just over 6
million
tonnes
 in 1980to 6. 5
million
tonnes
. The amount of
pulp
production
 increased gradually from just over 8, 1 tons in 1995 to 9, 8
million
tonnes
 in 2000.
Paper
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The paper
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 begins at 4 in 1980, decreased to 6 in 1990. There was a significant
rose
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rise
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 in the
number
 of
paper
,
growth
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growing
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 from just over 8, 5 in 1995 to 12
million
 tons in 2000
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advice
Your essay should ideally include an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The introduction here is brief and the conclusion is missing.
advice
Make sure your ideas flow logically from one point to the next. For instance, clearly separate the discussion of each of the three types of production (pulp, timber, paper).
advice
Your main points should be supported with precise data from the graph. For example, 'Paper begins at 4 in 1980, decreased to 6 in 1990' is somewhat confusing; ensure the figures are accurate and clearly presented.
positive
You have included relevant data from the graph to support your points, which is essential for a good task response.
positive
You correctly identified trends and fluctuations in the data, such as the significant rise in paper production.

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