Some people believe that after a child enters school their teachers will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is believed by some people that by the
time
Use synonyms
children start their formal education,
parents
Use synonyms
are
Verb problem
will
show examples
no longer have
impact
Add an article
an impact
show examples
due to
Linking Words
the teacher at
school
Use synonyms
. I disagree with
this
Linking Words
notion because
parents
Use synonyms
still have crucial tasks in shaping a child's values,
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
, and emotional well-being,
while
Linking Words
teachers primarily control academic and social skills within a structured environment.
Firstly
Linking Words
, as primary role models,
parents
Use synonyms
' impact on their youths' lives extends beyond
school
Use synonyms
years. Children are exposed to their
Use synonyms
parents'
Correct your spelling
parent's
show examples
attitudes and
behaviors
Change the spelling
behaviours
show examples
from birth until they grow older, which significantly shape their moral values. Even if the academic environment provides limited guidance on how pupils can function effectively in society, the youngsters will not be affected by it as long as their
parents
Use synonyms
can guide them, resulting in a better parent-child relationship.
For instance
Linking Words
, not every
school
Use synonyms
is as good as the other schools in small cities, leading to an imbalance of discipline among pupils.
As a result
Linking Words
, parental guidance continues to shape their choices and responses to external influences.
Secondly
Linking Words
,
although
Linking Words
teachers spend significant
time
Use synonyms
with children during
school
Use synonyms
hours, their relations are only limited to specific areas
such
Linking Words
as studies, extracurriculars, and social interactions in the classroom.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
due to
Linking Words
the large number of pupils at
school
Use synonyms
, teachers are not able to invest sufficient
time
Use synonyms
and attention solely in each individual student, leaving many problems unnoticed in the academy.
For example
Linking Words
, a child struggling with anxiety or low self-esteem may not receive the necessary support from a teacher who has to manage a class of 30 or more students.
This
Linking Words
highlights the limited scope of a tutor's influence compared to the personalized attention
parents
Use synonyms
can provide. In conclusion,
parents
Use synonyms
, with their intimate knowledge of their child's personality and
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
, are better equipped to identify
such
Linking Words
issues and provide tailored guidance and care at home.
Therefore
Linking Words
, the notion that
parents
Use synonyms
' influence would be neglected
due to
Linking Words
kids'
time
Use synonyms
at formal institutions can not be supported.
Submitted by azami06mufa on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph is well-developed with a topic sentence, supporting details, and a concluding sentence to enhance coherence.
Task Achievement
Include more specific examples or anecdotes to support your arguments and make your response more engaging.
Coherence and Cohesion
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the essay.
Task Achievement
The essay consistently presents a clear position and effectively argues against the notion that teachers have more influence.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have structured the essay logically, transitioning smoothly between different points.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: