Your town council has decided to demolish historic building due to lack of funds to renovate. Write a letter to your council man. say what the importance of this historic building is mention why it should be renovated rather than pull down suggest a plan to raise funds and maintain the building in the future Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir, I saw an article in the local newspaper regarding the demolishing of our historical fort. As a citizen, I am writing
this
letter to show my dissatisfaction with your idea. It is one of the historical buildings,
which
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built by the Mughal Empire in 1537.
Moreover
, the historical war against its destruction in 1600 by our freedom
fighter
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shows how important it was not
for
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our City, but
also
for the country.
Additionally
, I believe our authorities should change their decision as
this
building can be easily renovated. If we look closely, the
architecture
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structure and the technique used by builders
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that time
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highly impressive. A little modification and beautification can develop it into a famous tourist place.
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, our upcoming generation can learn about our prehistoric era through
this
building,
Lastly
, I would like you to introduce some ideas by which we can generate funds for
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renovation. The authorities should run
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to motivate city-dwellers about the importance of
this
building, and encourage them to donate some money for modification, and for maintenance we can conduct
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voluntary cleaning work twice
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the
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year. I hope
this
will help you to change your decision. yours Faithfully, Raj
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task achievement
While the letter is generally well-structured, adding more specific examples or details about the building's historical significance could strengthen your argument further.
coherence cohesion
Consider improving the logical flow between paragraphs, especially when transitioning from the importance of the building to suggestions for its renovation and maintenance.
task achievement
The letter successfully addresses all parts of the task, providing clear reasons for preserving the building and practical suggestions for fundraising and maintenance.
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The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a councilman, showing both respect and concern.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the argument, contributing to the overall coherence.
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The closing is polite and appropriately formal, reinforcing the respectful tone of the letter.

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