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The diagram below explains the process o f making woodpellets, used to heat buildings. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below explains the process o f making woodpellets, used to heat buildings. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing wood pellets, used to increase the temperature in buildings.
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, what stands out from the diagram is that the process consists of seven stages, beginning with arriving of sawdust, and ending up with the product's packaging. It is interesting to note that,
firstly
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, sawdust is transferred from the sawmill.
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, it is sent into fibres to be hammered and uniform in length in a hammer mill.
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, its temperature is boosted by steam, and
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 the dampened fibres proceed to a pellet machine through holes by forcing. After that, the pellets' heat is declined to make it cooler. Loose dust is swept to be cleaner before serving.
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, pellets are ready to be packed for selling in 40-pound bags, which are 18 kilos

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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