Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that social relationships are being affected in a negative way by modern communication methods.
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statement and will explain why in the following essay.
It must be understood that using intelligent devices t contact to other people may lead to laziness. Linking Words
In other words
, citizens just stay in certain directions and chat with their friends or family members, they will not want to go out to meet their relatives. Linking Words
Consequently
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can element some health problems Linking Words
such
as obesity or osteoarticular diseases. Linking Words
For example
, people who stay at home will be lazy and Linking Words
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may affect their education and careers in the future. Linking Words
Thus
chatting online should not be encouraged Linking Words
due to
its drawbacks.
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However
, some individuals argue that online communication is more convenient than meeting in real life as they can send information more easily. Linking Words
This
may be true, but chatting online can cause scams. Linking Words
This
is because cybercriminals are more popular now, accounts may be hacked and motivate a lot of problems Linking Words
such
as losing personal information, money and maybe one’s career. Linking Words
As a result
, the community can have psychological problems. From prior knowledge, every year, a large amount of Facebook user loses their accounts because of some links or websites that the criminals set up.
In conclusion, the method of using modern devices to contact may cause complications like laziness and unemployment. Linking Words
Therefore
, people should not rely too much on communication online despite the fact that it is convenient.Linking Words
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task achievement
Ensure examples are specific and directly related to the point being made. Clear and comprehensive ideas would include discussing both sides more thoroughly before reinforcing your standpoint.
coherence cohesion
Connecting phrases can be used more effectively to ensure the essay flows better. Linking words like 'therefore', 'furthermore', and 'consequently' can help. Revisiting and revising the logical progression of arguments can elevate cohesion.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and stays on topic throughout, showing a clear stance on the issue.
coherence cohesion
Both the introduction and conclusion are present, and arguments are generally organized.
Your opinion
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