In many countries the number of animals and plants is declining. why do you think this is happening? how can this issue be solved?
In current times, as a massive problem,
world
of fauna and flora has been shrinking. Add an article
the world
a world
Due to
Linking Words
this
, there are Linking Words
a great deal of
issues Change the quantifier
a lot of
many
plenty of
was
being made. Unnecessary verb
apply
Background
of Correct article usage
The background
this
case would be either some ecological impacts or consumption of individuals. And it includes today's contemporary constructions. Meanwhile, Linking Words
movement
that we can do is to reduce usage of them, Add an article
a movement
the movement
as well as
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contribution
Replace the word
contribute
for
Change preposition
to
growth
of Add an article
the growth
plants
and saves of animals.
In terms of these occasions, Use synonyms
cause
could be nowadays' buildings, which have been influenced Add an article
the cause
a cause
to
our environment. Because of them, neither the trees nor any flowers in urban cities have been lacking. If construction chores maintain their work, eco-zones will not be rescued, and Change preposition
by
apparently
it's challenging to cease these reforms. Add a comma
apparently,
For instance
, Linking Words
necessity
for them is being exacerbated day by day. Add an article
the necessity
a necessity
Subsequently
, Linking Words
usage
of livestock and Correct article usage
the usage
plants
Use synonyms
are
crucial in people's lives, Correct subject-verb agreement
is
such
as for their health, food, industry, Linking Words
rural
Correct word choice
and rural
works
. Fix the agreement mistake
work
Nevertheless
, without Linking Words
in
behalf of Change preposition
apply
plants
and animals, we cannot reside properly. We must preserve it in advance.
In these circumstances, not only might Use synonyms
contribution
Replace the word
contribute
for
one of the vital resources aid, but Change preposition
to
also
the young generations have to be taught simultaneously. Prior to Linking Words
do
Change the verb form
doing
this
, it will be the efficient way, and they should be demanded to do in practice. Owing to Linking Words
do
these reforms, our forthcoming would be without any difficulty and some needs. Youngsters should be Unnecessary verb
apply
justified
about these troubles regularly. The government should Verb problem
informed
also
release new rules Linking Words
which
related to Correct pronoun usage
apply
animals
protection and Change the noun form
animal
Use synonyms
plants
Fix the agreement mistake
plant
saves
. That's to say, all have to do action together. To give an example, Wrong verb form
saving
extinction
of livestock and flowers will be really detrimental, for the reason that, they are one part of our survival, and in some areas of Africa, it has already affected Correct article usage
the extinction
for
the people's nutrition, namely, they are being starving.
In conclusion, provided that humans Change preposition
apply
don't
Verb problem
are not
concern
about flora and fauna, our Replace the word
concerned
life
will Fix the agreement mistake
lives
be end
, and there Change the verb form
end
are
no way to be alive without them. And in the future, it will be more noticeable, so Change the verb form
is
that
now we have to try to keep our main resources.Correct word choice
apply
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