The pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000. Write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000. Write at least 150 words.
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given
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pie chart above shows how changed world
population
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between 1900 and 2000. In general, Asia had the biggest proportion of both pie charts and
Europe’
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Europe
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s
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's
percentage decreased.
Worl
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World
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population
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increased from 1.6 billion to 6 billion. Asia had been three-fifths in 1900. It decreased to 54
percent
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and Asia Pacific
included
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in 2000. Europe with Russia’s
population
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decreased dramatically from 25
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percent
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per cent
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to 14
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percent
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per cent
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. The North
America
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had not changed in a century. It had been a very small number in 1900 and it was still a very small number in 2000. Africa
had
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accounted for 4
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percent
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per cent
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of the world
population
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in 1900. It
incereased
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increased
sharply and accounted for 14
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percent
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per cent
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in 2000. In 1900, there had been only Latin
America
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.
Then
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,
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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included
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to
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Latin
America
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in 2000. It had been 3
percent
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in 1900. After that, it grew more than double. Others had not changed. It continued to be 3
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percent
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per cent
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until 2000.
Finally
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,
Middle
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the Middle
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East and North
America
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inclueded
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included
to
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in
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pie
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the pie
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chart and
world
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the world
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population
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in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, percent, america with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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