In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outwigh the disadvantages?
Thanks to
recently
developments in information and Change the adverb
recent
technonolgy
in Correct your spelling
technology
this
day that in the future the vehicle
will decrease Fix the agreement mistake
number of vehicles
for
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apply
the
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driver
and only Fix the agreement mistake
drivers
people
of traveller
could be Fix the agreement mistake
travellers
a
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passenger
. Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
Is
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Can
this developments
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this development
these developments
can
make Verb problem
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changer
for many Fix the agreement mistake
changes
people
will be better or make the environmental
more difficult to stay Replace the word
environment
hold
out of their Verb problem
apply
life
? For the following reasons.
Developing Fix the agreement mistake
lives
of
technology in the world will give many benefits Change preposition
apply
such
as alleviate
congestion, because there Wrong verb form
alleviating
is
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are
nothing
numerous Rephrase
no
vehicle
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vehicles
in
the roads and the Change preposition
on
traficjem
becomes Correct your spelling
traffic
more safety
with Correct word choice
safer
this
development. In addition
, this
technology is really important and more beneficial for earth
to be better in the future, because air pollution has decreased from using gasoline. Add an article
the earth
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, in
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the
developed countries have Correct article usage
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make
a good car or Change the form of the verb
made
motorcycle
from the electrical battery as Fix the agreement mistake
motorcycles
a
fuel like Tesla company, so many Correct article usage
apply
people
in the world Add a missing verb
are interest
interest
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interested
to buy
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in buying
this
product. Therefore
, the Earth will be better and more fresh without pollution from the exhaust.
Besides
, the beneficial
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benefits
from
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of
this
development will make any
impact Correct determiner usage
an
for
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on
environment
that always find a job from the company become a driver bus or truck. Add an article
an environment
the environment
This
is because will reduce job opportunities for many people
and feel
difficult to give their family an income. Verb problem
make it
Furthermore
, limited
of economical in the world more Replace the word
limits
decrease
, because they can not find a great chance to gain Replace the word
decreased
worklife
balance. In Indonesia Correct your spelling
work-life
work life
for example
, there many people
always go out from
their country to find their dream job in order they can make their life better in the future Change preposition
of
such
as buy
a new house, Wrong verb form
buying
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or make
make
business Verb problem
doing
by
their own.
In conclusion, from Change preposition
on
developing
of Replace the word
development
the
technology can give many benefits and reduce an opportunity for many Correct article usage
apply
people
as well. I believe with
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apply
this
issue will give the environment a ways to face every situation.Submitted by patricius.yohanes on
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