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The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The chart illustrates the proportion of
visitors
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 two sites namely Pop Parade and Music Choice over the span of 15 days.
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, the number of
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 both sites increased throughout the entire period of time.
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, Pop Parade was more popular than Music Choice during
this
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 time except for a couple of days. As can be seen from the line graph, Pop Parade started with just under 120
thousand
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visitors
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 and remained still until the third
day
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, and
then
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 witnessed a significant drop to nearly 40
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visits
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 the seventh
day
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.
Subsequently
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, after a slight rise for two days, the number of
visits
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 surged considerably to 150
thousand
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visits
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the
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day
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 11. Again the
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 met a decline to about 80.000 till the thirteenth
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 and
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finally
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 the number of
visitors
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 increased dramatically to 170
thousand
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visitors
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. The Music Choice site,
On the other hand
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, started with only 40,000
visits
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 and
after
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the rise
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rise
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 to 60,000
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in
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third
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the third
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day
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.
Then
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 it oscillated until
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day
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 11 and experienced a dramatic increase to 120,000
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 and surpassed the other site. And
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 the end, it fell significantly to less than 80
thousand
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visitors
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, visits, thousand, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Music sites
  • Web traffic
  • Number of visits
  • Trend analysis
  • Initial phase
  • Steady increase
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant change
  • Peaks
  • Turning point
  • Growth rate
  • Seasonal variation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Long-term trend
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