The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart illustrates the proportion of

visitors

to two sites namely Pop Parade and Music Choice over the span of 15 days.

Overall

, the number of

visits

to both sites increased throughout the entire period of time.

Additionally

, Pop Parade was more popular than Music Choice during

this

time except for a couple of days. As can be seen from the line graph, Pop Parade started with just under 120

thousand

visitors

and remained still until the third

day

, and

then

witnessed a significant drop to nearly 40

thousand

visits

on the seventh

day

.

Subsequently

, after a slight rise for two days, the number of

visits

surged considerably to 150

thousand

visits

on

day

11. Again the

visits

met a decline to about 80.000 till the thirteenth

day

and

finally

, the number of

visitors

increased dramatically to 170

thousand

visitors

. The Music Choice site,

On the other hand

, started with only 40,000

visits

and

after

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to 60,000

visits

on the third

day

.

Then

it oscillated until

day

11 and experienced a dramatic increase to 120,000

visits

and surpassed the other site. And in the end, it fell significantly to less than 80

thousand

visitors

.