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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015
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The given bar chart compares the number of American
households
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 by their yearly
income
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 in three specific years-2007,2011and 2015. In general, the lowest number of
households
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 throughout the period was the
group
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 which saw to earn 75,000 to 99,999
dollars
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 per year. It can
also
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 be seen that all
income
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 groups experienced an upward trend except for the 25,000 to 49,999
group
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. With regards to the first three bands which had a lower
income
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. By 2007, there were about 20 to 25
million
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households
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 had under 50,000
dollars
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 in
income
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 per year . In the next 4 years , the less than 25,000 dollar
group
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 and the 25,000 to 49,999 dollar
group
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's figure increased to about 28
million
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 and exactly 30
million
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households
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 , respectively. Meanwhile, these two data had a small decrease to around 26-27
million
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households
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 in 2015. In terms of the 50,000-74,000 dollar
group
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 , its figure remains stable with just over 20
million
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households
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 throughout the timeframe. Turning to the remaining groups , the figure of
households
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 in
75,000
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the 75,000
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-
99,999
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99,999-dollar
dollars
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group
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 fell from nearly 15
million
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 in 2007 to around 13
million
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 in 2011 before ending the process with immediately 15
million
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 . Moving onto the
group
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 which earned 100,000
dollars
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 or more per year, there was a small drop in the number of
households
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 from just under 30
million
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 by 2007 to around 27
million
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 by 2011.
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, its data rose slightly to over 33
million
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, making it
become
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dominant among other earning groups.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income, group, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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