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The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.

The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.
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The table illustrates the amount of money spent by consumers on three different types of stuff in various countries around the world, in the year 2002.
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, it can be seen obviously that the most expense by residents in all countries was
food
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 category,
whereas
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 the lowest was leisure and education for the whole.
According to
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 the chart, 28.91% of consumers expensed on
food
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 purposes, followed by clothing and entertainment purposes, which accounted for 6.43% and 2.21%, respectively.
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, Italians spent money on
food
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 and drinks the most, constituting 16.36%, and the clothes category and educational category were ranked second and
third,
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being 9% and 3.20% , in order. Afterwards, there was 18.8% of
food
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/drinks/tobacco
expenditure
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 by Spaineses, meanwhile, there was varied in range from 1.98% to 6.51% in another two categories.
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, citizens in Sweden consumed
food
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 and drinks occupied 15.77%, followed by 5.4% of clothing and footwear type and 3.22% of leisure and academic type.
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, Turkey people spent their money on
food
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 purposes for the most, which
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 claimed the highest
expenditure
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 of all, contributing 32.14%. In the meantime, there was 6.63% of
expenditure
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 on clothes and footwear in Turkey and 4.35% of consumer
expenditure
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 on leisure and academic aspects.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • consumer spending
  • cultural priorities
  • economic conditions
  • disposable income
  • standard of living
  • work-life balance
  • proportion of spending
  • cultural preferences
  • comparison of spending
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