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**You have just spent a weekend at a friend's house. When you returned home, you discovered that you had left a coat there. There are some important belongings in the pockets.** **Write a letter to your friend. In your letter** - explain that you have left the coat there - say what the coat looks like, where you think you left it and what was in the pockets - make some suggestions about how to get all of your belongings back

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Dear Pat, I hope you are keeping well! I had
such
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 a great weekend visiting you! Unfortunately, I'm writing because I think
,
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 I've left my
coat
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 in your place. I got
little
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a little
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 worried as there are some important
thing
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things
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 in that
coat
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's pockets. The
coat
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 is black
and
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, and
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 there is a white logo
at
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on
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 the back.
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Also
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 there are red buttons down the front side. You will recognize when you see it
,
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 it is my everyday
coat
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. I'm almost certain that I left it hanging from the chair in your kitchen. I remember that I took it off just before we
start
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started
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 eating our lunch yesterday. If it's not there, it is possible it dropped behind the sofa. The main problem is
,
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that
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 my wallet with my
driver
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driver's
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 licence was in that
coat
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's pocket
and
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, and
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 I am planning to drive to my mother's house tomorrow. I was wondering if you could check those spots when you get a chance.
This
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 evening my sister is going to drive
my
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me
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 home from her friend that living close to your place. Would you be up for giving my
coat
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 to her if she
stop
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stops
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 by at the front door of yours? Alternatively, I can visit you early
in the
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tomorrow morning by bus. Let me know which one suits you better
and
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, and
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 sorry for
trouble
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the trouble
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. Take care, Ege

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more clear detail about how your friend can send the coat back.
task response
Task response: Keep the tone friendly and clear. This is good, but some lines sound a little hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use shorter sentences and link ideas more clearly. This will make the letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in each sentence or part. Some sentences now have too many ideas together.
task response
Task response: You clearly say why you are writing and what the problem is.
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Task response: You describe the coat, say where it may be, and tell what is in the pockets.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are both good and fit a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The ideas move in a natural order from the problem to ways to get the coat back.
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