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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. *why might this be the case *Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Today, house rental is becoming less viable, but more affordable. Yet most
people
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 tend to buy
homes
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 disregarding the rental market.
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 phenomenon is understandable
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 and should be encouraged. In
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 essay, the motives and positives behind
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 widespread mentality will be discussed. There are a plethora of elements
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 to the uprising preference to own
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, it feeds the sense of security amongst
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.
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 becomes important to protect ourselves from the uncertainty of the recent unstable socio-economic fluctuations.
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, families try to care less about the housing market changes and consider themselves
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 by simply purchasing
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 and more importantly, landlords may decide to evict their rented property to relocate at any given time, which will be disastrous for deeply rooted households. Because they have already established their lives there, it will be difficult to accept the urgency to move out rather
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.
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, it is a favourable trend and should be embraced amongst society members. Despite the fact that housing prices are much
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 nowadays, owning a home will be highly rewarding as well. It may be considered
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an investment too.
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, after the booming of the housing market in the early 2000s.
People
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 who owned
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 back
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surprised
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 by the skyrocketing
rises
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 of their property’s worth.
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, it should be regarded
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huge
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 benefit to children. As stability and feelings of belonging integrate into their
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 well-being. Owed to the mental relief and reassurance that their parents have their own permanent place.
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,
people
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 are eager towards getting a grip
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 their own fate as much as they
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. Even if that sense is derived from owning a home, it is acceptable and valid enough, in my humble opinion.

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grammar
Ensure all sentences are clear and grammatically correct to enhance comprehensibility.
examples
Include more specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
conclusion
Conclude your essay with a stronger summary of the main points discussed.
arguments
You provided clear and logical arguments for why owning a home is prioritized over renting in some countries.
structure
Your introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion, and your conclusion reflects on your opinion well.
organization
The essay is well-organized and follows a logical flow from one point to the next.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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