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The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.

The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.
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The given line graph illustrates the rate of
coffee
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sending
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 overseas from
Brazil
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,
Colombia
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 and
Costa
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Rica
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 within a
period
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 of 10 years, commencing from 2002.
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,
Colombia
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 and
Brazil
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was
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had
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 the highest rate of
coffee
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 export from 2002 to 2006
while
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 the opposite can be observed for
Costa
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Rica
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.
According to
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 the diagram, at the beginning of the
period
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, the amount of
coffee
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 in
Costa
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Rica
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 was 15 Kilograms and it decreased sharply until 2006 when it reached around
8Kibgrams
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8 kilograms
.
then
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this
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 number keeps moving upward to finish
just
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at just
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 under 20
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Kibgrams
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Kilograms
 in 2002.
brazil
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 started
by
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at
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 around 12
Kibgrams
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then
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 during 4 years to reach 15Kibgrams ,
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this
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 figures continue the fluctuation over the
period
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 to finish under 25Kibgrams.
at the end
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 of the
period
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 ,
Colombia
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 received the same as
Costa
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Rica
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 it was at the beginning of the
period
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.
moreover
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coffee
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 export from
Brazil
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 was
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more significantely
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significantely
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significant
 than that
of
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from
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Colombia
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brazil, colombia, costa, rica, period, kibgrams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Illustrates
  • Amount
  • Exported
  • Abroad
  • Capacity
  • Trends
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Significant
  • Peaks
  • Troughs
  • Reasons
  • Climate
  • Demand
  • Trade policies
  • Compare and contrast
  • Fluctuations
  • Economic conditions
  • Agricultural developments
  • Unique elements
  • Production scale
  • Market strategy
  • Global coffee demand
  • Agricultural technology
  • International trade agreements
  • Competitiveness
  • Quality
  • Reputation
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