The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.

The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of  the exports  reached a higher capacity  than in the begining.
The given line graph illustrates the rate of
coffee
sending
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sent
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overseas from
Brazil
,
Colombia
and
Costa
Rica
within a
period
of 10 years, commencing from 2002.
Overall
,
Colombia
and
Brazil
was
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had
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the highest rate of
coffee
export from 2002 to 2006
while
the opposite can be observed for
Costa
Rica
.
According to
the diagram, at the beginning of the
period
, the amount of
coffee
in
Costa
Rica
was 15 Kilograms and it decreased sharply until 2006 when it reached around
8Kibgrams
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8 kilograms
.
then
this
number keeps moving upward to finish
just
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at just
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under 20
Kibgrams
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Kilograms
in 2002.
brazil
started
by
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at
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around 12
Kibgrams
then
during 4 years to reach 15Kibgrams ,
this
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these
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figures continue the fluctuation over the
period
to finish under 25Kibgrams.
at the end
of the
period
,
Colombia
received the same as
Costa
Rica
it was at the beginning of the
period
.
moreover
,
coffee
export from
Brazil
was
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more significantely
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significantely
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significant
than that
of
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from
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Colombia
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brazil, colombia, costa, rica, period, kibgrams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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