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The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The provided maps illustrate how the
park
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 of Grange has changed from 1920
untill
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until
 today. It can be clearly seen that the whole city has experienced significant changes during the period. There used to be some seats in around
of
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the city in 1920,but they have been demolished recently.Another striking change is the conversion of
stage
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a stage
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 for musicians into an Amphitheatre for concerts in the west of
the
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Grange
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park
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Park
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 from 1920
untill
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until
 now.
Moreover
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,the Rose
garden
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gardens
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 in the
north east
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northeast
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 and
south west
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southwest
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 of the
park
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 have been removed and they have been turned into the cafe and empty area,respectively.
However
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,the Rose garden in the
north east
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northeast
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 of the place
have
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 remained unchanged over the period. It is interesting to note that there was a Fountain in the
center
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centre
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 of the
park
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,but the government has converted Fountain into
Rose
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a Rose
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 garden which has been surrounded by Seats.Another interesting change is the transformation of the Pond for water plants into the children's play area in the
north east
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northeast
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 beside the cafe between 1920 to
this
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 moment.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,there used to be a Glasshouse in 1920,but It has been replaced by
water
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a water
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 feature which is located in the east of the area.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pond
  • northwest corner
  • large central open area
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented space
  • playground
  • eastern border
  • parking lot
  • convenience
  • commercial zone
  • amenities
  • walking path
  • encircles
  • joggers
  • accessible
  • entrances
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