The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in england and Wales betwen 1851 and 1901.

The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in england and Wales betwen 1851 and 1901.
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table illustrates how many silk
factories
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and
workers
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there were in Wales
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England from 1851 to 1901.
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, it can be seen
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more
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were constructed throughout the period, the total workforce witnessed a downward trend.
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, there were more female
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than males for the whole timeframe. Regarding the first 3 years of the timespan where the gap between genders was enormous, even though about 130.000 people were working in the silk industry with women accounting for more than half, only 272
factories
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were put up. As for the next decade, a peak of 761
factories
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was seen in order to cope with roughly 110.000
workers
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( approximately 60% were female), both of which saw a downward trend in the next ten years to 693
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and less than 92.000 people, respectively. Looking at the remaining years with a less significant disparity
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between the
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in 1881, nearly 8000 people more than males.
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,
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gap was narrowed to only 2000
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by 1891 before recovering to more than 12.000 in 1901.
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, the total
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went down to just around 40.000
workers
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in just 623
factories
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by the end of the timespan.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words factories, workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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