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Some people prefer to live in house, while others fee that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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fulfill
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 residential needs, there is a popular discussion about living in a landed
house
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 or living on a high-rise building. I agree that living in a landed
house
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 would provide more advantages than living in a high-rise building for several reasons. First of all, living in a landed
house
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 could offer more comfortable aspects,
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 as ownership and privacy. A landed
house
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 could be owned without a time limit and lived across multiple generations. On the other side, an
apartment
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 has a certain period to be lived
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 the usage period of the building.
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, living in a landed
house
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 could provide more privacy
space
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 because it fully separated
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 from the neighbours. Meanwhile, in a high-rise building, people would live in the same area side by side and it could cause noise problems among the residents.
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, a landed
house
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 could be modified following the owner's wants
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 people who live in an
apartment
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 have restrictions to modify their
space
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. The homeowner could customize their property
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 up a garden, swimming pool or basement on their properties.
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, people who live in apartments have restrictions to modify their
space
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due to
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 the construction safety so they are unable to add anything. In conclusion, living in a landed
house
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 could be more comfortable than living in an
apartment
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, especially
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 the ownership aspects, high privacy
space
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 and possibility
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modify
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.
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, a landed
house
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 could have a higher cost to be owned rather than an
apartment
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, especially in a metropolitan city
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 the limited supply.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Privacy
  • Living space
  • Gardening
  • Yard
  • Customization
  • Renovate
  • Building regulations
  • Ownership
  • Noise levels
  • Detached properties
  • Investment value
  • Appreciate
  • Long-term investment
  • Community
  • Social interaction
  • Shared facilities
  • Proximity
  • Neighbors
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