Some people prefer to live in house, while others fee that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?
To
fulfill
residential needs, there is a popular discussion about living in a landed Change the spelling
fulfil
house
or living on a high-rise building. I agree that living in a landed house
would provide more advantages than living in a high-rise building for several reasons.
First of all, living in a landed house
could offer more comfortable aspects, such
as ownership and privacy. A landed house
could be owned without a time limit and lived across multiple generations. On the other side, an apartment
has a certain period to be lived due to
the usage period of the building. Then
, living in a landed house
could provide more privacy space
because it fully separated area
from the neighbours. Meanwhile, in a high-rise building, people would live in the same area side by side and it could cause noise problems among the residents.
Correct article usage
the area
Then
, a landed house
could be modified following the owner's wants whereas
people who live in an apartment
have restrictions to modify their space
. The homeowner could customize their property such
as build
up a garden, swimming pool or basement on their properties. Wrong verb form
building
On the other hand
, people who live in apartments have restrictions to modify their space
due to
the construction safety so they are unable to add anything.
In conclusion, living in a landed house
could be more comfortable than living in an apartment
, especially for
the ownership aspects, high privacy Change preposition
of
space
and possibility to
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of
modify
. Replace the word
modification
However
, a landed house
could have a higher cost to be owned rather than an apartment
, especially in a metropolitan city due to
the limited supply.Submitted by cracko.eko on
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...