The table and graph below show information about cinema visit is in Auckland between 1995 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and graph below show information about cinema visit is in Auckland between 1995 and 2003.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables and graph below illustrate the
inormation
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information
regarding movie
visit
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visits
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in Auckland from 1995 to 2003.
Overall
, it can
been
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be
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seen the tables
was
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were
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more
higer
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higher
attandance
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attendance
than Frequency (
Avarage
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Average
visit
) cinema
visit
all age group.
Morover
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Moreover
, the line
figure
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cinema
visit
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visits
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according to
age group that trends flectuation. Regarding the data Tabel,
Attedance
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Attendance
started from 62% in1996
then
it increased to 72% in 1998. After
that
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It declined
70
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by 70
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% in 1999. The
next,
it has been increased 72 % in 2000.
In addition
,
Frequncy
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Frequency
Avarage Began from 10, 3 in 199, it increased to 11.1. After
that
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it declined to mostly 8 between 1998 to 2000. Cinema
visit
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visits
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according to
age group,
it
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started
50+
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at 50+
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at 15 in 1999, it has
flectuated
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fluctuated
until at end periods at
aproximatelly
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approximately
15.5.
However
, 5-35 began
10
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at 10
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in 1999, it had
flectuaded
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fluctuated
until the end periods to 10.5 in 2000.
Then
39-49 started point about 10.5 in 1999, it
flectuated
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fluctuated
until
at the end
to 15 in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visit with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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