Parents allowed their children to use ipad. Do tou agree or disagree

Nowadays,
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iPads
have
important
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role for
children
because
it
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they
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have many educational apps that enhance learning and development in
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school. Some
parent
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parents
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don't have
mich
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much
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time to take care
their
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child
then
they
use
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iPad
to raise their child.
Ipad
have
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advantage
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and
disadvantage
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for
the
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children
. I think
children
at
age
below 2
years
shoul
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should
not
use
ipad
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iPad
but
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age
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above 2
years
can
use
ipad
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iPad
. I will discuss the
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and
disadvange
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disadvantages
from
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following
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the following
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paragraphs. On the one hand,
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the Ipad
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Ipad
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iPad
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have
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benefit
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for elementary school students because
ipad
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iPad
have many educational apps for
the
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apply
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students and
ipad
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iPad
can stimulate their imagination.
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Furthermore
,
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the Ipad
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Ipad
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iPad
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can improve
children
's
hands-eyes
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hands-eye
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coordination and fine motor skills. In the future technology will grow
up
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and have innovation,
it
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and it
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would be good
to
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for
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the
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children
to learn how to
use
the
technilogy
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technology
at
the
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a
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young
age
.
On the other hand
,
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are many
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of
ipad
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iPad
using
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in
children
at
age
below 2
years
.
In
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the
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medical research,
they
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prove
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proves
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that
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the
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children
at
age
below 2
years
who
use
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screen time
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for more
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more
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than 2 hours per day
increase
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increased
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risk of autistic-like
behaviors
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behaviours
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such
as lack of interaction
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with
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to
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with
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other people,inattention and conductive disorder. Autistic-like
behavior
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behaviour
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tend
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to be a big problem in the future.
Moreover
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ipad
is
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the
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way to access the internet that
have
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many contents
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that
inappropriate
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are inappropriate
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for
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to
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the
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children
such
as
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violence
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videos
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video
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videos
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and sexual
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video
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and
children
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learn
leran
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learn
from these contents
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which
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that
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make
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them
to
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apply
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have
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inappropriate
inappropiate
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inappropriate
behaviors
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and many social
problem
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problems
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will come
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. Another
disadvatage
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disadvantage
of using the
ipad
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iPad
is the blue light that
affect
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to
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the eyes and
increase
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risk
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the risk
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of
eyes
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problems. Overusing of
ipad
can lead to
reduce
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the
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physical
activitys
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activities
activity
and
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to
increased
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their weight and become an
obesity
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children
that have many medical problems
following
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. So parents should monitor and control the
ipad
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iPad
use
by their
children
and give them suggestions about should and shouldn't
behaviors
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behaviours
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.
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,
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iPads
have pros and cons
to
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for
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the
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childrens
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children
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. I think
children
below 2
years
shouln't
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shouldn't
use
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an ipad
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ipad
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iPad
but
children
above 2
years
can
use
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ipad
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iPad
under the control of their parents
that
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which
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will
make
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most benefit
to
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their
children
.
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