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The graph shows the proportions of three nutrients in thre different diets. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the proportions of three nutrients in thre different diets. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented pie charts depict a comparative analysis of the amount of sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar in various diets. A general look
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 the data shows that the amount of available nutrients varies across meals and snacks. Examining the details, it is understood that breakfast and lunch have relatively equal shares of all the nutrients with approximate percentages of 15 and 25 respectively. Dinner,
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, is shown to be the richest meal in
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sodium
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percentages of 43% and 37% for each. Snacks,
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, account for almost half of the
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available
 sugar in one's diet.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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