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Many parents choose to teach their children at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh its drawbacks?

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 epoch,
education
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is
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has
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vital
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a vital
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 role in
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children
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children's
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life
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lives
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,
however
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, many guardians
give
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apply
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preference
to teach
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teaching
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 their
children
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 at
homes
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home
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 rather than choosing
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education
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an education
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 centre for them.
according to
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demerits
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outrace
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outweigh
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 of merits
,
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 because everyone needs
educational
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an educational
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 environment which
parents
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 cannot provide
it
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apply
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.
i
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 will explain it in upcoming paragraphs.
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predominate
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predominant
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 reason for teaching
children
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 at
their
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apply
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home
that is
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children
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 strengthen their relations with family members. To explicate, if anyone thought by
parents
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 at their homes
then
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 they can spend their more time with
knowperson
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know person
known person
know-person
 rather than spending time in
schools
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.
Secondly
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, who child teaches in
homeshool
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homeschool
.
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 they will
more
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be more
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selfdepended
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self-dependent
 in their upcoming
life
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 rather than those students who take classes in
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schools
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school
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.
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, there
is
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are
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 prominent factors which agree with
taught
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what teaching
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 should be in
schools
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. Chiefly,
homeshool
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homeschool
 would
be
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have
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negative
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a negative
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 effect on
students
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students'
student's
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 manners
such
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,
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apply
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 discipline, how can treat
with
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apply
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others and how they
can
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give respect to elders. without these
manners
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manners,
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 anyone will not
success
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 in future.
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, some
parents
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 are not well educated they
do
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are
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 not able to give proper
education
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 to their
children
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.
Apart from
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this
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,
parents
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 never make educational environment ( like
schools
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in
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at
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 home.
Finally
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, if students attend classes at
their
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home
then
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 they cannot participate
during
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in
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 the
compition
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competition
compilation
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are
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is
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 inaugurated by traniers at
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education
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the education
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 center ) and
learner
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learners
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 cannot judge theirselves. In
an
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apply
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conclusion,
parents
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 and
schools
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are play
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play
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equal
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an equal
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 role in
child
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a child
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,
s
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's
life
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,
however
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,
education
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centers
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centres
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 are more necessary for
everyone
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everyone's
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life
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.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. Even though you have these sections, they need to be more developed and fluent.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical structure of your arguments. Try to connect your ideas more smoothly and avoid jumping from one point to another too abruptly.
task achievement
Your points need more support and specific examples. This will help make your arguments more persuasive and clear.
task achievement
Pay attention to your grammar, punctuation, and spelling to improve readability.
task achievement
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of homeschooling, showing a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows an attempt to address multiple aspects of the topic, such as social behavior and educational environment.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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