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You ride a bicycle to work, but there is a problem with the parking. Write a letter to the manager of the Parking Management Company.

#bicycle #work #manager #management #company
Dear Sir, I hope you are
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doing
doig
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doing
 well, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that regarding
problem
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a problem
the problem
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 with
parking
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the parking
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 area at
company
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the company
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 I am Taufiqurrahman as marketing officer is one of
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an employee
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employee
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employees
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 at the
company
 which still
intership
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internship
 and
there is
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 a long enough
will
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apply
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contribution
with
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to
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 the
company
. I would like to tell you what
have
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 been happening every day when I arrive
to
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at
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 the parking area that become
problem
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a problem
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 for
biycle
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bike
 users who will come to work at the
company
. the parking area is not enough for us as
biycle
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bicycle
 users.
Therefore
, I hope you can consider
this
 situation as manager at the
company
.
this
 is for our
convinience
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convenience
 and
also
 flexsiblitas within working. Thank you so much, I am looking forward to hearing you soon Yours
sirecenly
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recently
 Levi
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task achievement
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors to ensure your writing is clear and professional. For example, 'doig' should be 'doing', and 'biycle' should be 'bicycle'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. This helps improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
Provide specific details about the parking problem and how it impacts you and other bicycle users. This will strengthen your task achievement score.
greeting and closing
The letter has a proper greeting and closing, which is essential for formal correspondence.
logical structure
The letter addresses the parking issue clearly and has a logical sequence of ideas.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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