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the table below shows tge results of survey of first-year students who take courses in a particular university

the table below shows tge results of survey of first-year students who take courses in a particular university
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The table delineates the percentage of freshmen giving good ratings for different aspects of a university in three specific years
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2000, 2005 and 2010
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, three of
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 courses saw an increase, namely teaching quality,
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 and electronic
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whereas
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 remained
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unchanged
 or decreased. Notably,
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 consistently the leading
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 of modules offered ( ROMO) was the lowest through the timeframe. Beginning with
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 rates, it initiated at 84% in 2000,
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 shot up to a peak of just under 90% in 2005 before receding to 88% by 2010.
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 of teaching quality almost opposite
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 pattern, albeit at a lower level: it started at 65% and hit the lowest point with 63% in 2005, followed by a rebounding to 69% in the
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 year. With
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, it steadily rose from 45% to 88% which equaled to
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.
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, looking at buildings and teaching facilities, the trend is
somewaht
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 different; it levelled off at 77% throughout a decade period. Moving on to ROMO, it went down in
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 timescale of ten years from 32% to 27% in 2010 to rank
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 in the chart.

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