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the topic of the share of income earned by the top 1 percent from 1975 to 2015.

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The provided line chart illustrates the percentage of seven countries
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 earned income by the top 1
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 based on a world wealth and income database from 1975 to 2015.
Overall
, it is clearly observed that all countries experienced growth continuously.
In addition
, the United States was in the top spot among other nations during the entire period.
To begin
 with, there was an increase in Canada, Italy and Japan between 1975 and 2010. As the data shows in 1975 the proportion of Canada started at around 7% and it rose significantly to around 9% before it soared uninterruptedly to 13%
at the end
 of the period.
Similarly
, both Italy and Japan had a marginal rise during the same time frame. Those began at around 6% and
then
 they rose gradually to 9%.
In contrast
, there was a deviation trend in the US, Germany, France and the UK.
For example
, both the proportion of the US and France started
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 than 8% and they have different end points which were 18% in 2015 and 8% in 2011 respectively.
Next,
the percentage of Germany started
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 11% in 1975.
This
 figure fluctuated until 2005 before it ended at around 12% in 2010.
In addition
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 the UK appeared in 1990 which was 10% and
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 significantly to 12% in 2010.
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Revisit the percentages provided for accuracy and consistency to ensure that they align with the data on the chart.
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The essay demonstrates a logical structure and flows well from one idea to the next.
supported main points
The main points are supported effectively with specific data from the chart.
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay provides a clear comparison between different countries, highlighting trends and deviations effectively.

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