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The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015. at least 150 words.

The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015. at least 150 words.
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The
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table above shows children’s trouble in two primary schools between 2005 and 2015. In general
school
a
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A
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 had more problems
both
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in both
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 years and
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the school
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school
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school’s
b
’s percentage of problems didn’t change much. Reading ability
inreased
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increased
only
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by only
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 1
percent
both
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in both
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school
a
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A
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 and
school
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School B
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b
 between 2005 and 2015. Handwriting in
school
 a 28
percent
 both in 2005 and 2015.
Handwriting
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 didn’t change
also
 in
school
b
 it stayed
7
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at 7
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percent
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per cent
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. Spelling
ın
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in
school
a
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decrease
Wrong verb form
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 from 30
percent
 to 25
percent
 in 2015. In
school
b
 ıt increased double. In
school
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school,
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a
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 problem of verbal expression of ideas was 35
percent
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per cent
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 in 2005 but it fell to 21
percent
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per cent
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 in 2015. In
school
b
 it climbed only 1
percent
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per cent
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 on
decade
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the decade
a decade
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. Concentration in
lesson
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lessons
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 decreased sharply from 40
percent
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per cent
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 to 18
percent
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per cent
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 in
school
 a. It stayed
same
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the same
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 percentage in
school
b
 in 2015. Following instructions had been 42
percent
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per cent
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 when started and
the
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it reduced
24
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by 24
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percent
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per cent
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 in
school
a
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between 2005 and 2015. It rose double
ın
Correct your spelling
in
school
b
 on
decade
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the decade
a decade
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, percent, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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