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The chart below shows the percentage of young people at university in six European countries in 2000 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the percentage of young people at university in six European countries in 2000 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph
compare
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 the
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proportion
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 of university
students
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 in different European countries in two years 2000 and 2007.
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, Poland had the
heighest
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highest
 proportion of
students
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 over the two years,
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 Spain
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 the least one in 2007. Meanwhile, there were more young individuals
studied
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in
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univerisity
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universities
 in Italy,
UK
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 and Poland, but others had
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opposite
 trends. Clearly, there were 64% of young people located in Poland chose to study
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 university in 2000, and it increased to 78% in 2007 ranked as the first one.
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the UK
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 saw the same upward trend from 38% to 52% and 46% to 54% respectively.
By contrast
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, the percentage of college
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 in Spain and Norway decreased slightly. In 2000, 46% of young people chose to study
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 university, but that figure for 2007 was only 41%. As for Norway, that proportion started with 66%, falling to 65%.
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,
those
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percentages
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 of
universitiy
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university
students
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 in Finland remained
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 same level at 70%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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