Traditional food is undergoing great changes and being replaced by new diets. What do you think are the reasons and what do you think about this phenomenon?

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In recent times, we have seen traditional

foods

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going through sublime changes and being overtaken by

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diets.

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is because they take

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time to prepare and the original spices are becoming scares. I think that

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is unhealthy. Traditional

foods

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are well know

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to be

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that

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time to be made ready. Eventually, in our

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generation

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we tend to lack the

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to be on the stove for long

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leading us to swiftely move to new easy and

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meals.

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, the seeds of these ancient meals are becoming

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due to

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new scientific approaches being used nowadays to make plants or animals that grow fast.

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, in Zimbabwe, a traditional chicken would take 8 weeks to be fully grown to an extent where it can be cooked, yet now there are scientifically birds that will only need a minimum of 4 weeks to be ready for serving.

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reasons, we see now

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old days

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being replaced by new

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sources.

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think that these new diets are unhealthy. Because of the way they are made, they have a lot of fat which is not good for our

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these

fats lead to unwanted

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as obesity. To prove

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, in America, a study published by The Times magazine showed that, people who

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shifted their diets from

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traditional

to recent are prone to being obese and other

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diseases. I believe

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phenomenon should not be entertained. In conclusion,

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we lack the

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needed to prepare traditional meals and

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keep supporting fast

foods

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move is unhealthy and should not be left to rule over us.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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285 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

1. Globalization
2. International cuisines
3. Ingredients
4. Health and nutrition
5. Veganism
6. Keto diet
7. Paleo diet
8. Urbanization
9. Ready-to-eat meals
10. Fast food
11. Media influence
12. Social media platforms
13. Food trends
14. Economic factors
15. Mass production
16. Traditional ingredients
17. Social changes
18. Nuclear families
19. Convenience
20. Culinary heritage

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