There is a table shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished and the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how were pleased they were visit, during the same two periods.
There is a table
shows
the numbers of Wrong verb form
showing
visitors
to Ashdown Museum during the year
before and the year
after it was refurbished and the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors
how were pleased they were visit
, during the same two periods.
Change the verb form
were visited
were visiting
Year
before refurbishment from Add an article
The year
A year
total
number of 74000 Change the article
a total
the total
due to
chart
the high figure of Correct article usage
the chart
visitors
ended up dissatisfied while
after renovation
Add an article
a renovation
this
result changed with
satisfied. The Change preposition
to
least
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lowest
percent
of both charts which are obvious the Replace the word
percentage
year
before and after restoration demonstrated that no response to surveys of visitor satisfaction.
In details
, 31,013 Fix the agreement mistake
detail
visitors
were unsatisfied while
before Correct word choice
apply
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the refurbished
refurbished
but Replace the word
refurbishment
these figure
decreased to 13,800 after the repair. The number of satisfied people increased from 22,200 before the revamp to 36,800 after it. 15 Change the determiner
this figure
these figures
percent
of the total Change the spelling
per cent
travelers
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travellers
of
74,000 were very satisfied in the pre-renovation survey, and 35 Change preposition
apply
percent
in the post-survey of 92,000 people. The figure of very dissatisfied Change the spelling
per cent
visitors
declined from 10 percent
according to
the first chart to 5 percent
after the renovation.
To conclude
, the refurbished
of Replace the word
refurbishment
museum
had the greatest impact on the number of dissatisfied and satisfied people.Fix the agreement mistake
museums
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