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There is a table showing the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished and the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how were pleased during the same two periods.

There is a table showing the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished and the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how were pleased during the same two periods.
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There is a table showing the numbers of
visitors
 to Ashdown Museum during the
year
 before and the
year
 after it was refurbished and the charts show the result of surveys asking
visitors
 how were pleased during the same two periods. A
year
 before refurbishment from
total
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a total
the total
show examples
 number of 74000
due to
 the chart the high figure of
visitors
 ended up dissatisfied
while
 after a renovation
this
 result changed to satisfied. The lowest percentage of both charts which are obvious the
year
 before and after restoration demonstrated that no response to surveys of visitor satisfaction. In detail, 31,013
visitors
 were unsatisfied before refurbishment but these figures decreased to 13,800 after the repair. The number of satisfied people increased from 22,200 before the revamp to 36,800 after it. 15 per cent of the total of 74,000 were very satisfied in the pre-renovation survey, and 35 per cent in the post-survey of 92,000 people. The figure of very dissatisfied
visitors
 declined from 10 percent
according to
 the first chart to 5 percent after the renovation.
To conclude
, the refurbishment of Ashdown
museum
Capitalize word
Museum
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 had the greatest impact on the number of dissatisfied and satisfied people.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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