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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problemas, as well as practical problems.

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Living abroad has
popularized
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 during the
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 decades. It is mainly explained by the necessity of searching for better
oportunities
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opportunities
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visiting
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any
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breathtaking places. Despite having some drawbacks related to
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, the advantages outweigh the demerits. In
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 essay, I will explain my reasons in detail. To start with, there are more than 100 different languages worldwide.
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, humankind has to learn either the native tongue spoken in the country that will be visited or
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 it is considered the universal language.
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,
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 it used to be
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 stumbling block, nowadays, most people have learnt more than one speech by removing the boundaries to communicate
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 each other.
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, living overseas helps the population to learn readily a new tongue.
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, in the United States, psychologist researchers have shown that the best techniques to learn a new lingo are living in a country
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 the language to be learnt is the mother tongue and avoiding speaking their mother speech.
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, if humanity desires to live abroad, the main cultural characteristics of the region should be learnt in order to be part of
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 specific society.
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, there are many 'cultural shocks' in all fields because lives are strongly different from the environment where people were raised.
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,
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the flavours
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 of the food, ways of wearing clothes, and rules and governmental policies vary among countries.
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, managing the cultural variations is a method for acquiring knowledge
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 learning techniques for survival overseas.
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, it has been proved that people who live at least once outside their native countries, tend to be more resilient.
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,
eveyone
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everyone
 that desires to live overseas should learn how to modify their habits in order to leverage the experience and
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 the easiest ways to struggle against the difficulties.

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grammar
There were minor spelling mistakes such as "opportunities" and "every". Ensure that you proofread your work to avoid these errors.
clarity
Try to use more specific and varied sentence structures to improve readability.
content development
While the essay addresses the prompt, some arguments could be expounded upon further for greater clarity and impact.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the argument.
content development
Good use of examples particularly the one about learning a new language in the United States.
content balance
Attempts to engage with both advantages and disadvantages, showing a well-rounded view on the topic.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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