The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the
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apply
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consideration is the line graph
depicts
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depicting
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the
amount
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number
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of closures and working
shops
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in
the
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a
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particular country from 2011 to 2018. In general, the two
kind
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kinds
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of
shops
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had the same trajectory which saw
an
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a
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downward trend throughout the timeframe.
Additionally
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, despite experiencing the highest number in the first decade, opening
shop
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shops
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had a dramatic drop
at the end
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of
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the entired
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entired
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entire
period. Commencing with the openings, in
further
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detail, the figures stood at around 8500 before dramatically falling down to 4000 in 2012.
In contrast
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, there was a rapid increase in the next 2 years which went up to just over 6000
shops
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and
then
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decreased back to 4000 in 2015.
However
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, from 2015 to 2016, the number of opening
shops
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reamained
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remained
stable at 4000. During the period of the
last
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2 years, there was a small fluctuation before hitting its lowest point at 3000 in 2018. Turning to the remaining statistic,
which
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it
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could be seen that the number of closures started at around 6300
shops
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and
then
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dropping
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dropped
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by 6000 in 2012.
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However
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However,
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in 2013, the figures reached a peak at over 7000 before
had
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having
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a signification plunge
at
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to
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under 1900
shops
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in 2015. Next year, it tended to grow
up
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apply
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again to over 5000 before stabilizing
about
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at about
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5100
shops
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at the end
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of the timeframe
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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