The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentage of British unemployed allocated their time during the previous year.
According to
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the data, it is evident that
housework
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, shopping and
job
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hunting are the most common
activities
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for
women
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and
men
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,
while
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drinking and playing
sport
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represented the lowest number of
women
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and
men
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. In the morning,
housework
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accounted for the highest
activities
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for
women
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, at 48%,
while
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22% of
men
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commonly searched for
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job
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jobs
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. Shopping was the second highest of time spending for
women
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and
men
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, both at 26% and 20% respectively. Only
few
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women
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and
men
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participated in drinking and playing
sport
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. ranging between 1 and 4%, similar
with
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in the afternoon. In the afternoon, the majority of
women
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also
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did
a
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housework
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, with a relatively high at 21%, nearly the same level as
men
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doing
housework
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in the morning. 17% of
women
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both
did
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went
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shopping, and
visiting
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visited
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friend
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and relatives.
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, watching TV accounted for the majority of
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men
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men's
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activities
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, at 14%.
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was followed closely by gardening, at 13%,
while
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men
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spent their time
on
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apply
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visiting
friend
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friends
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and relatives, and
job
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hunting, both at 12%.
Overall
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,
this
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data indicates the
difference
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activities
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between
men
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and
women
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. most
women
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are responsible for
housework
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and shopping,
while
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men
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searched
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search
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for
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job
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jobs
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, job, activities, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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