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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentage of British unemployed allocated their time during the previous year.
According to
 the data, it is evident that
housework
, shopping and
job
 hunting are the most common
activities
 for
women
 and
men
,
while
 drinking and playing
sport
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sports
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 represented the lowest number of
women
 and
men
. In the morning,
housework
 accounted for the highest
activities
 for
women
, at 48%,
while
 22% of
men
 commonly searched for
job
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jobs
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. Shopping was the second highest of time spending for
women
 and
men
, both at 26% and 20% respectively. Only
few
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women
 and
men
 participated in drinking and playing
sport
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sports
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. ranging between 1 and 4%, similar
with
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to
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 in the afternoon. In the afternoon, the majority of
women
also
 did
a
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apply
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housework
, with a relatively high at 21%, nearly the same level as
men
 doing
housework
 in the morning. 17% of
women
 both
did
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went
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 shopping, and
visiting
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visited
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friend
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friends
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 and relatives.
Conversely
, watching TV accounted for the majority of
men
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men's
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activities
, at 14%.
This
 was followed closely by gardening, at 13%,
while
men
 spent their time
on
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apply
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visiting
friend
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friends
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 and relatives, and
job
 hunting, both at 12%.
Overall
,
this
 data indicates the
difference
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different
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activities
 between
men
 and
women
. most
women
 are responsible for
housework
 and shopping,
while
men
searched
Wrong verb form
search
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 for
job
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jobs
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, job, activities, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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