The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the percentage of British unemployed allocated their time during the previous year.
According to
the data, it is evident that
housework
, shopping and
job
hunting are the most common
activities
for
women
and
men
,
while
drinking and playing
sport
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represented the lowest number of
women
and
men
. In the morning,
housework
accounted for the highest
activities
for
women
, at 48%,
while
22% of
men
commonly searched for
job
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jobs
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. Shopping was the second highest of time spending for
women
and
men
, both at 26% and 20% respectively. Only
few
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women
and
men
participated in drinking and playing
sport
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sports
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. ranging between 1 and 4%, similar
with
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to
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in the afternoon. In the afternoon, the majority of
women
also
did
a
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housework
, with a relatively high at 21%, nearly the same level as
men
doing
housework
in the morning. 17% of
women
both
did
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went
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shopping, and
visiting
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friend
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friends
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and relatives.
Conversely
, watching TV accounted for the majority of
men
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activities
, at 14%.
This
was followed closely by gardening, at 13%,
while
men
spent their time
on
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apply
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visiting
friend
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friends
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and relatives, and
job
hunting, both at 12%.
Overall
,
this
data indicates the
difference
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activities
between
men
and
women
. most
women
are responsible for
housework
and shopping,
while
men
searched
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search
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for
job
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jobs
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, job, activities, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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