In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?
In the modern
world
, a majority of countries
tend to develop their agriculture system. However
, it does not work, there are large numbers of people
around the world
still in famine
. This
essay will look at the causes of this
problem and the way to tackle this
problem.
To begin
with, the agricultural system has taken a high position in the competitive world
. However
, agriculture depends on a geographical position. Due to
this
, in some countries
they can not cultivate the harvests thus
people
go to famine
. In addition
in some countries
, where there is water pollution or shortage. From this
, countries
can not manufacture some products, then
they have to export those products from other countries
, and all of the export's
products tend to be expensive Change noun form
export
therefore
, people
whose standard of living is poor, can not purchase that food chain.
There are some solutions to tackle this
issue. At
the first stage, the government's participation has greatly Change preposition
In
influence
Wrong verb form
influenced
on
Change preposition
apply
this
problem. The governments have to consider the citizens' standard of living. If the livelihood is bad, the government will do some project to improve citizen's
livelihood, Fix the agreement mistake
citizens'
such
as, add
a workplace to suit disabled Wrong verb form
adding
people
and others, and try
to give allowance. Wrong verb form
trying
Furthermore
, individuals and the government working
together to save or clean the environment. Wrong verb form
work
Also
, farmers have to relax the soil to harvest more.
To sum up
, to get rid of famine
people
from all over the world
have to save the environment or do some projects to help people
who go hungry. If all people
are conscious , famine
will decrease.Submitted by buyabuya201 on
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task achievement
Clarify some of the points you make and add specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, when discussing geographical limitations, mention specific regions that suffer from these problems.
coherence cohesion
Improve sentence structure and grammar to make your ideas clearer and more cohesive. For example, use varied sentence lengths and structures to maintain reader interest and clarify complex points.
coherence cohesion
You included a clear introduction and conclusion in your essay, which frames your discussion effectively.
task achievement
You identified relevant issues related to agriculture and hunger, and suggested practical solutions.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.
You essay structure should look something like this:
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
- One immediate practical solution is to...