The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
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The given table compares the percentage of national consumer spending in 2002 on diverse things in five major countries.
Overall
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, individuals spent more
money
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on food, drinks, and tobacco in all countries than
other
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on other
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expenses. The expenditure
of
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on
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these items was higher in Ireland and Turkey,
whereas
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leisure time activities and education
was
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were
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paid lower in Spain and Ireland over other countries. As the table reveals data on Irish
people
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people's
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spending, there
were
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was
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highest
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the highest
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proportion
on
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of
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foods
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food
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and smoking ,at 28.91%.
Nevertheless
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, the proportions were lower for free time
practices
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practice
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and studying ,at 2.21%.
Regarding
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Italy,
which
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citizens spent their own pile of
money
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for
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on
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clothes ,at 9.00% ,
while
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the lowest percentage was
in
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on
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spending bills for leisure and education , at 3.20%. The figures for Spanish people spent
money
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for
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on
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consumption and clothing, and they are only 18.80% and 6.51%, respectively.
By contrast
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, in Sweden, foods and tobacco
was
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were
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paid 15.77% compared with 3.22%
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money
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of money
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was
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spent
for
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on
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free time
doings
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doing
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and studying. In terms of Turkish individuals, 32.4%
money
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were
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was
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spared
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spent
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on food, beverages, and smoking,
while
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people spent
money
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for
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on
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clothing and shoes
lower
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less
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than other items in 2002.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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