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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph describes the imported
amount
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 of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 in Canada, the US, the
UK
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 and Germany.
Overall
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, more
coffee
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 is imported than
tea
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, except for the
UK
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 which has more
tea
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 brought into the
country
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.
Moreover
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 is
also
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 the
country
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 which imports the largest
amount
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 of
tea
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,
while
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 Germany has the highest
amount
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 of
coffee
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 imported. It is observed that 80,000
tonnes
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 of
tea
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 is imported to the
UK
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, making it the
country
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 having the highest
amount
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 of
tea
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 imported,
whereas
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 the total
amount
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 of
coffee
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 imported into the
country
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 is
lowest
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the lowest
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, with 30,000
tonnes
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.
Additionally
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, Germany takes the second place in
term
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terms
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 of
tea
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 imported, with 40,000
tonnes
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,
whereas
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 its figure for
coffee
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 is the highest, having 50,000
tonnes
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.
Furthermore
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, Canada and the US share
similar
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a similar
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 pattern in the import of both drinks. They all import
tea
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 the least, with 20,000
tonnes
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. The figures for
coffee
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 in those countries are higher than
which
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those
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 of the
UK
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, recorded at approximately 40,000
tonnes
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, tea, coffee, uk, country, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • import/export
  • commodity
  • metric tons
  • comparative
  • trend
  • data
  • statistics
  • significant
  • notable
  • figure
  • country-specific
  • bulk
  • graph/chart
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • fluctuate
  • dominant
  • minor
  • contrast
  • analyze
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