the graph belows shows the number of tourists a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The given line graph
illustrate
in detail the portion of Change the verb form
illustrates
visitors
in a Caribbean area from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, at first glance, we can see the total numbers
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number
upward
trend over the Add an article
an upward
years
,moreover
in 2017 at 3.5 millions
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million
of
people Change preposition
apply
was
the highest rank, Change the verb form
were
however
, tourists who stayed on island
had a slight Add an article
the island
fluctation
between 2015 and 2017 and Correct your spelling
fluctuation
fluctuations
also
the largest numbers was 1.5 that was the similar porprotin
in several Correct your spelling
proportion
years
such
as 2013, 2014, 2015, and 2017 as well. as we can observed
the figure of Change the verb form
observe
passangers
on cruise ships were increased marginally and the highest level was 2 millions of Correct your spelling
passengers
visitors
in 2017.
Turning to the data inmore
detail, Correct your spelling
in more
visitors
staying on island
in 2010 at the lowest number and Add an article
an island
the island
was
remained steady until 2011, Unnecessary verb
apply
aftewards
there was a slight growth that accounted for 1.5 of people in 2012 and 2013, Correct your spelling
afterwards
then
the share of visitors
in this
graph was almost similar in 3 years
( 2013, 2014, 2015).
In 2016, the figure of travellers had a gradual decrease at
1.10 and the next year in 2017 again went back to the share of 1.5.
As presented in Change preposition
to
chart
, the Add an article
the chart
tourist
staying on Fix the agreement mistake
number of tourists
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ships Correct your spelling
cruise
were
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has
rised
over the Correct your spelling
raised
risen
years
, expect
in 2012 Correct your spelling
except
that
there was a significant decrease Correct word choice
when
that
the share of them was Correct word choice
and
in
the same Change preposition
apply
of
the first year in 2010.
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as
Then
, there were
a Correct subject-verb agreement
was
considerably
increase and the highest Change the adverb
considerable
numbers
was in 2017 at 2 Fix the agreement mistake
number
millions
people.Change to singular
million
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