The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005.

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bar graph illustrates the rate of spending hours on housework activities with different groups of male and female

employment

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and unemployment in the UK within a period of 20 years, commencing from 1985.

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, the highest rate of spending time on housework can be observed for unemployed

women

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in 1985 and 2005

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the opposite can be observed for men with full-time

employment

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in 1985 and 1995.

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the graph, in 1985, unemployed

women

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had the largest number of hours by 7,

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figure was very similar for unemployed

women

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in 2005.

women

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with part-time

employment

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were 5 in 1995, which was 5 times higher than the men with full-time

employment

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in 1995.

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majority of time spent on housework activities by

women

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with full-time

employment

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was just under 3 in 2005 which

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number in1995 just under 2 and

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category which was

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in the second position.

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