The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005.

The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the UK between 1985 and 2005.
The
given
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bar graph illustrates the rate of spending hours on housework activities with different groups of male and female
employment
and unemployment in the UK within a period of 20 years, commencing from 1985.
Overall
, the highest rate of spending time on housework can be observed for unemployed
women
in 1985 and 2005
while
the opposite can be observed for men with full-time
employment
in 1985 and 1995.
According to
the graph, in 1985, unemployed
women
had the largest number of hours by 7,
this
figure was very similar for unemployed
women
in 2005.
women
with part-time
employment
were 5 in 1995, which was 5 times higher than the men with full-time
employment
in 1995.
A
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majority of time spent on housework activities by
women
with full-time
employment
was just under 3 in 2005 which
this
number in1995 just under 2 and
this
category which was
stand
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in the second position.
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