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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
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The pie chart gives information about the average household expenditure in a country between 1950 and 2010.
Overall
, the pie chart
compare
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between
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six sectors
that
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namely housing , food , education ,
health
 care , transportation and
other
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others
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 and
it is clear that
 the largest segment was housing in the year 1950 .
In
contrast
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 the smallest region was
health
car
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care
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 in 1950. First of all ,
during
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 2010 the section
of
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on
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 food was
the
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 higher percentage than
section
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of
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 food in 1950 . The number of education and
health
 care in
2010was
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2010 was
 above 10 per cent respectively.
While
 the same slide in 1950 was just under 10 percentage respectively.the lowest rate of household expenditure was
health
car
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care
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 which accounted for 2.4% .
Moreover
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 the largest percentage was housing
to
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apply
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made for 72.1
protion
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per cent
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words health with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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