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The table below presents the food consumption per person weekly in a European country in 1992, 2002 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below presents the food consumption per person weekly in a European country in 1992, 2002 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the amount of food consumed by individuals per week in a European country in 1992, 2002 and 2012.
Overall
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, individuals consumed
vegetables
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 the most, followed by
meat
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 in all three periods.
Although
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 the
consumption
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 of
meat
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 showed a declining tendency, their
consumption
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 generally rose by different degrees. Starting with the graph for
vegetables
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 and
meat
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, their
consumption
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 was much higher than that of the other three. One of the major features is that people ate
vegetables
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 almost twice as much as
meat
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; their
consumption
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 of the former ranged from 2140 to 2220
whereas
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 that of
meat
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 altered from 1132 to 1211. Another striking feature of the graph is their different
consumption
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 pattern.
While
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 there was a gradual increase in the
consumption
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 of
vegetables
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 from 1992 to 2012,
meat
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 experienced a slight decline from 1211 in 2002 to 1132 in 2012 regardless of its minor rise from 1992 to 2002. Turning to the table for wheat, beans and cheese, wheat seems to be the most dominant of the three as its
consumption
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 shifted from 837 in 1992 to 997 in 2012. In spite of the fact that people ate beans only about half of wheat with approximately 550 grams, they both showed a constant growth for the examined time.
Finally
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, the
consumption
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 of cheese remained the lowest since it only stayed just above 100.
Furthermore
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, its
consumption
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 remained unchanged from 2002 to 2012 with 125
in contrast
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 to a small increase from 1992 to 2002.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetables, meat, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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