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The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products.

The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products.
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The diagram illustrates the growing phase of the
pineapple
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 and the derivative product created by the
pineapple
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.
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,
pineapples
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 have three cultivated sizes, and those are created into three different products.
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, the production of
pineapples
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 starts by growing the crops at a temperature of 28 to 30 degrees Celsius.
Pineapples
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 are harvested at different times, so there are small, medium, and large sizes. The whole cycle of production takes around 12 months. Each
pineapple
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 is given a distance of 26
centimeters
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, and
the
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apply
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fertilization is done in the seventh month. The large
pineapple
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 has a height of 30
centimeters
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 and a weight of 2 kilograms.
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, the production of derivative products of
pineapples
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 starts after harvesting the crops. All types of
pineapples
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 are cleaned by running water beforehand. A knife peels the small
pineapples
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 to separate the core and the skin before creating juice using an extractor.
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, the medium
pineapples
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 are
also
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 separated by a knife before being cut into pieces, and canned
pineapples
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 are produced. Meanwhile, the large
pineapples
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 are preserved by wax before they are contained in a large basket before being exported by ship.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, pineapples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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