Today people do less exercise. Some people believe that conducting sporting events such as the Olympics or World Cup encourage people to live healthy while others indicate that there are various other methods to remain healthy. Discuss both views and state your opinion.
It is considered by some that
Olympics
or Correct article usage
the Olympics
World
Cup can encourage people
to keep fit, while
there are other
who think that we have other Fix the agreement mistake
others
chioce
to remain healthy. In my opinion, I believe that Correct your spelling
choice
choices
Olympics
may not encourage Correct article usage
the Olympics
people
to keep
healthy, and if Verb problem
stay
people
want, there have
a lot of Verb problem
are
way
to stay healthy.
Change to a plural noun
ways
Olympics
and Correct article usage
The Olympics
World
Cup is
a friendly Change the verb form
are
compete
between the country all over the Replace the word
competition
world
. The athlete
from all over the Correct article usage
Athlete
world
are
have the same dream, Unnecessary verb
apply
is
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which is
earn
the highest Fix the infinitive
to earn
honor
for their country. They will do their best to do exercise all Change the spelling
honour
the
day, and company with the huge stress in their heart. Most Correct article usage
apply
of
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apply
people
knows
that we cannot stand Change the verb form
know
this
level of ecercise
, for Correct your spelling
exercise
athletes
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athletes'
athlete's
body
and Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
muscle
, we just appreciate it. And for Fix the agreement mistake
muscles
public
, every athlete may Add an article
the public
like
a Add a missing verb
be like
super hero
of our country when they Correct your spelling
superhero
earned
the golden medal. So, most Wrong verb form
earn
of
Change preposition
apply
people
Add an article
the people
are
feel respect Unnecessary verb
apply
to
them, rather than feel encouraged Change preposition
for
for
live Change preposition
to
healthy
.
There Change the word
healthily
has
a lot of Verb problem
are
way
to make Change to a plural noun
ways
people
remain healthy. For instance
, like the sport
activity Change the noun form
sports
conduct
by Wrong verb form
conducted
school
or Fix the agreement mistake
schools
company
, Fix the agreement mistake
companies
the
interest Correct article usage
apply
group
like hiking or swimming hold Fix the agreement mistake
groups
the compete
for Verb problem
competitions
public
, or like the gym opened Add an article
the public
at
the residential area. Change preposition
in
Fix the agreement mistake
These
This
Correct determiner usage
These
Replace the word
activity
active
Replace the word
activity
are
around Change the verb form
is
people
's normal life, they will be motivated when they saw
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see
the
others like Correct article usage
apply
Fix the agreement mistake
neighbours
neighbour
doing Fix the agreement mistake
neighbours
workout
or running when they go out to the supermarket or Add an article
a workout
Wrong verb form
buy
buying
Wrong verb form
buy
Correct your spelling
something
somthing
. Most Correct your spelling
something
of
Change preposition
apply
people
Add an article
the people
are
feel motivated by Unnecessary verb
apply
the
other civilians or Correct article usage
apply
friends
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friends'
friend's
change
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changes
,
like someone Remove the comma
apply
lose
weight by running or doing work out, Change the verb form
loses
then
they maybe want to join them to keep fit.
At
Change preposition
In
the
conclusion, Correct article usage
apply
people
can doing
the normal exercise to remain healthy, like running, hiking, Change the verb form
do
be doing
swimming
, and they may not be motivated by the athlete.Correct word choice
and swimming
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