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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is, in your opinion, the most important thing to succeed in life?

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People can experience failure in academic areas, but in many cases, the individual tends to succeed in real
life
. The most important thing for a
person
 to be successful, I think
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is connected to the mindset of the individual. People have academic failure for numerous reasons and causes. The most likely being laziness. Unproductivity can hold back
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a
person
's
success
 in a school environment
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when the
person
 gradually becomes less interested and determined
in completing
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 any of the subjects given by the curriculum. The secret
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 the
success
 of a
person
 regardless of their
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 academic achievement is
problem solving
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 skills. If an individual is able to find the solution to varying problems regardless of their situation, it greatly
enchances
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enhances
 the probability of their
success
 in real or adult
life
 where survival and wits matter immensely. Even though there are many methods and factors that encourage a
person
's
success
 in
life
, the most important thing to do so, In my opinion, is wisdom. Problems arriving
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 different times can give a
person
 information and experience about what is the right thing to do and what is not in a specific situation,
thus
 the individual remembers and considers the action to be beneficial at that time and place and has better
success
 compared to those who haven't had
such
 a problem.
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 all that's been stated so far, academic achievement, in some cases, doesn't contribute to the
success
 of
life
 for everyone.
Instead
, experience and cleverness can help with
success
 and finding solutions better than any school activity.
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