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Diagram showing the structure and use of a simple solar panel.

#structure #panel
Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to
change
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changing
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 sun rays into energy through a solar
panel
.
Overall
, it is a simple process, commencing with the structure of
solar
Correct article usage
the solar
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panel
 and the
transform
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transformation of
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 cool
air
,
water
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and water
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 into hot. Beginning every
parts
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part
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 of a solar
panel
, it can be observed that to create a solar
panel
 people need
prepare
Fix the infinitive
to prepare
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 4 parts.
Firstly
 was a metal
box
 that
have
Wrong verb form
had
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 a triangle shape.
Then
 people cut a glass transparent and put it on top of the
box
.
Finally
, there are two tubes that
made
Add a missing verb
are made
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 of metal and stick at two
head
Fix the agreement mistake
heads
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 of the
box
. Turning to the remaining diagrams, when cool
air
 has been put in
Correct article usage
the Inlet
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Inlet
Correct article usage
the Inlet
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 tube, sun rays shine into
box
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the box
a box
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 through
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the glass
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glass
Correct article usage
the glass
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, it
transform
Change the verb form
transforms
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 into heat energy and
made
Wrong verb form
makes
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air
Add an article
the air
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more warm
Replace the words
warmer
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then
 let it come out from
Correct article usage
the outlet
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outlet
Correct article usage
the outlet
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 tube.
Similarity
Replace the word
Similar
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 to cool water, it has exactly the same process
like
Change preposition
as
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air
 but there is a water pipe has been added.

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introduction
Ensure that the introduction concisely summarizes the diagram's purpose. For instance, 'The diagram illustrates the structure and functioning of a simple solar panel that converts sunlight into energy.'
clarity
Improve sentence structure to enhance clarity: 'Overall, it is a simple process that starts with the structure of the solar panel and describes how cool air and water are converted into hot air and water.'
transition words
Use connectors for better cohesion: 'Firstly, a triangular metal box is used. Secondly, a transparent glass cover is placed on top of the box. Finally, two metal tubes are attached at both ends of the box.'
process explanation
Clarify the process description by specifying details and avoiding repetitions: 'The transparent glass allows sunlight to enter the box, transforming it into heat energy. This heats the air or water, which is then emitted from the outlet tube.'
comprehension
Good attempt at explaining the process of how a solar panel functions.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Semiconductor
  • Electric current
  • Efficiency
  • Glass casing
  • Structural support
  • Durability
  • Mounting
  • Electrical wiring
  • Connectors
  • Inverter
  • Battery storage
  • Maintenance
  • Sustainable energy
  • Sunlight penetration
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